Apply - Initial Story Board idea

I decided to work with a story of separation, where a man was leaving a woman at the train station. The story is a sad one of longing between the two characters but nothing can be done for they are being separated by something greater than them, not just the train.

scene starts with the couple holding hands with the woman outside and the man inside the train, as the train starts to run the hands separate with the male moving off the screen, then cuts to a wide shot of the woman running as the train moves in the same direction but faster, and as the train goes off the screen the woman falls to her knees and cries in her hands as the wind carries away her hat.

After i have created my characters i want to refine the story and the camera angles, to add more drama and draw to the story.